Six Sentence Sunday, October 9, 2011
This is my second six sentence Sunday. I had such a good time last week, I had to come back for more! These six are the (new) opening of my romance novel ILLEGALLY YOURS (unpublished).
Ana Travares had let down her guard. She’d stopped hearing her brother’s voice in her head, warning her not to say too much. Telling her not to make friends too easily. Reminding her that she, that they, didn’t have the luxury of trusting other people. Ever.
At some point, she’d let her shoulders drop from their usual spot around her ears and started to believe that maybe, just maybe, nothing too terrible would happen, as long as she kept her nose clean and didn’t break any rules.
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October 9, 2011 @ 12:22 pm
Ooh I love this!!! I can see there is so much history – I’m thinking a sordid family secret – left to uncover. And I can’t wait 🙂
October 9, 2011 @ 12:30 pm
Ooooh! Can’t wait to see what wil go terribly, terribly wrong, now that she’s all comfortable! Awesome six. Very characterizing…and ominous.
October 9, 2011 @ 12:49 pm
Sounds like she’s got an interesting (and mysterious!) history. 🙂
October 9, 2011 @ 12:51 pm
Great six! Love the sense of foreboding in these lines!! Very intriguing opening!
October 9, 2011 @ 1:47 pm
*Really* great new beginning. Even if I didn’t already know the story, it would be obvious that Ana is in deep trouble, and that she’s going to blame herself.
October 9, 2011 @ 2:14 pm
Uh oh. Sounds like she’s about to be disappointed.
October 9, 2011 @ 4:43 pm
Definitely an intriguing opening. This one makes me want to read on. Well done six!
October 9, 2011 @ 5:01 pm
Wonderful opening. We’re immediately hooked. The phrase about letting her shoulders drop down from her ears tells us so much about her. Great character.
October 9, 2011 @ 5:33 pm
Okay…sordid family history. Great hook because now I’m dead curious. Well done and welcome to a fellow SSS newbie!
October 9, 2011 @ 7:49 pm
Heartbreaking-assuming I’m understanding the context, based on title. You’ve captured the emotions perfectly. Well done! Looking forward to reading more.
October 9, 2011 @ 8:34 pm
Intriguing introduction. Can definitely sense her emotional battle.
October 9, 2011 @ 9:17 pm
Now you’ve made us curious.
October 9, 2011 @ 9:48 pm
Great six that provides some enticing insights into the story and characters!
J.C.
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October 10, 2011 @ 12:26 am
Intriguing six! I want to know what’s gonna happen next! 🙂
October 10, 2011 @ 9:27 pm
Oooh! I really like this… leaves me with so many questions that I would read on to find answers for 😉
October 12, 2011 @ 4:03 pm
I love the opening. Sucks that they can’t trust anyone, though. Hopefully that wall will be broken down even further.
October 16, 2011 @ 12:36 pm
Loved this!! I hear a deep and dark back story And you say Anna has a brother too? 😉